It’s been decades since I read Hinkel’s text. Now that I’m “scanning and updating” I gotta say … Hinkel’s book is a HOT MESS! Yes, I love Hinkel, but the writing of this text is beyond dreadful. I’m essentially re-writing the text. For my own books, I wrote to 8th grade reading level because everybody can do that! Professor Lind wrote Hinkel’s book … and wow … Ponderous doesn’t even come close! Here’s an example (before and after).
Original text:
The purpose of this chapter is to provide a complete and comprehensive survey of the biological causes of hair growth. Information of this kind is important to the student of electrology for three reasons. First of all, as the “expert” in the field, you will often find that you have to explain to clients the biological origin of hair and how it comes to be a problem. Secondly, you must be able to apply your knowledge to each new problem that comes through your door; the nature of the problem frequently determines the strategy for treatment, especially when it involves an alteration in the patron’s glandular balance. Finally, obvious signs of glandular imbalance should be recognizable to you, so that you can direct your client to specialists who are trained to handle the disorder. A knowledge of the principles and problems of hair biology and the glandular system is essential to competency in the field.
Revised text:
This chapter reviews the biological causes of hair growth. Electrologists must be able to explain the origins of hair growth, and why excess hair is seen as a problem. Additionally, some of your clients will be experiencing accelerated hair growth because of a hormone imbalance. Therefore, you should be able to recognize some signs of hormone imbalances and direct your client to an appropriate physician or endocrinologist.
